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                                Chapter 57. PROFESSIONAL PROPOSAL 
								
                                Basics of Writing a 
                                Professional Proposal --- --- 
Introduction 
This section explains the basics of writing and 
revising a professional proposal--why this type of paper exists and how to start, organize, and edit it.  
You may want to first see the "Introduction"
before reading this page.  Be sure, before or after reading this "Basics Page," to 
see "Sample Papers"
by students.  For more advanced information, go to "Advanced Methods."   
     
 
       
 
  
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       Why
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The heart
of a proposal is  a problem and a solution.  It is never a pat
answer--an easy or obvious one--nor a simple report of a situation.  A
proposal actively engages the audience in new ideas: sometimes a new awareness
of a hitherto unknown problem or need, and sometimes a new solution to a problem
or need.  Even if the problem or need is obvious, and the general solution
is clear, too, a good proposal does not restate the obvious: instead, it details
the problem and then even more carefully provides new details of the method or
steps for solving the problem. 
Proposal writing has many uses in the professional 
world, and some in school, too. In the professional world, proposal writing is a 
necessary skill if you wish to thrive and, in some workplaces, simply survive.  
There will be times when you need to institute new or different activities; to 
do so, you will need official permission, and such permission will require a 
formal or informal proposal.  Some of you may become owners of your own 
small businesses and will need to learn to sell your products or services to 
others; to do this, you also will need to know the basic skills of proposal 
writing.  Your services or products will help solve or fill your clients' 
problems or needs with specific results, and a proposal can use these elements 
of presentation to explain to your clients why they should engage your business.  
Proposal writing also is helpful to know for acquiring bank loans, convincing 
government units to make a change, and even sometimes for deciding when to 
propose marriage or thinking through a potential marriage proposal from someone 
else. (There is nothing like a little bit of cause-and-effect logic to decide 
whether and when you can promise to live with someone for the rest of your 
life!)   
In academic courses, proposal writing is useful for 
setting up a scholarly or scientific project to propose to an instructor.  
Proposal writing--or the basic elements in it of problem, solution, and 
results--also can be useful in analyzing events and people in such disciplines 
as history, psychology, sociology, chemistry, physics, and other classes.  
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The major section of WritingforCollege.org called "Starting"
offers a number of useful ways to start thinking, speaking, and writing about a
subject. The advice here, which follows, is for this chapter's type of paper in particular.  
When brainstorming a
proposal, you might start by imagining some need or problem of which you are aware
in your place of work or academic subject.  Then imagine a way to satisfy this need. Another way
to start a proposal is to propose
yourself to someone for a job. Still another way to start is to write a simple complaint letter about a product,
service, or activity that is wrong and
needs changing--and then to suggest a method of making the change.  You
also can propose a paper or other academic project by describing a problem or
need, first--a missing, incomplete, or incorrect idea or belief, for
example--and then describing how your paper will detail a solution or resolution
to this problem.   
You can brainstorm by writing down a long 
list
of ideas, events, and details you want to discuss; then choose one or a few and
start writing.  You also can start by 
freewriting:
simply letting out your thoughts and 
feelings
about the project or situation on paper.  
Outlining
is another option, especially if you are an experienced proposal writer. 
If you are looking for an especially interesting, sharp, or reader-grabbing proposal,
you might start by first developing some interesting or wild opposite
ideas--that is, make up some 
fictions--and
write about those a bit; then look at them and see if any of them reflect an
interesting truth or otherwise new angle on how to see problem or need. 
(However, don't get too wild!  The final proposal must be an
accurate reflection of reality.)  You also can practice 
imaging. 
Stretch, then sit back, relax, breathe, clear your mind.  Then ask
yourself, "What image accurately demonstrates the core of the problem or
need?"  You also can practice imaging by imagining your 
readers,
or one typical reader, and writing your first draft for that person in answer to
the questions he or she might have.   
The 
style,
tone,
or sense of 
audience
you use in your early drafting can, of course, be anything you want. 
However, if you are the type of person who writes early drafts better if you
know what tone of voice to use, then for a proposal, you should choose a
professional 
tone--businesslike
if it is for a workplace proposal, or formally academic if it is for a college
course.  Your report should have a tone of confidence, fairness, and logic.
  
The 
style
should be formal unless you specifically have been told that an informal style
is preferred.  In a workplace proposal, your style generally should be
clear, simple, straightforward, and efficient.  In an academic proposal,
your style should make use of somewhat longer and more complex words, phrases,
and sentences.  In either type of writing, avoid sounding emotional, but
also avoid sounding mechanical; try instead to sound logical, thoughtful, and
open to suggestions.  In some situations, a friendly tone is helpful; in
others, a tone of strength and certainty is more appropriate.   
You also may start with a sense of your 
audience,
if you wish.  If you do, consider not only the immediate person(s) who
might see your proposal, but also the wider network of peers, other supervisors,
and/or committees who might read it, as well. 
In any case, write your first drafts however you 
wish.  Then revise as needed so that the appropriate tone, style, and sense 
of audience are evident in each paragraph and sentence. 
Also be
sure--as you build your paper--that you have plenty of details.  In 
professional writing, details may include quotations, paraphrases, 
personal-interview information, illustrations or images, and charts, lists, 
diagrams, or other statistics.  Be sure to cite and document each, even 
illustrations and experiential anecdotes, using in-text citation a bibliography.   
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   When
organizing a professional proposal, you may want to consider three
practical matters.  Be aware of 
  (1) the typical visual/textual design, (2)
the
central key to organizing this type of paper, and (3) dangers to
avoid.  General principles of organization are described in detail in
the "Organizing"
chapter.  Specific details for this type of paper are below.   The 
"Introduction" has 
already shown you the following organization for a professional proposal:     The 
Visual Plan or Map 
  
  
                         
 
  
    
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        TYPE
        OF PAPERPROPOSAL/ PURPOSE
 OVERALL RESULT
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           Section 1: Problem, Need,
        or Background
 
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           Section 2: Solution (Proposal)
 
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           Section 3: Plan (with Schedule, Budget,
        and/or Personnel)
 
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           Section 4: Results
 
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           (Your Credentials if Needed)
 
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        RESTATEMENT
        OF PURPOSE CONCLUDING IDEAS and/orPROJECTIONS
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        Bibliography 
        [if Needed] 
        Bitson, A.J. Book. et al. 
        Jones, D. L. "Chart," et al. 
        Smith, M. S. "Diagram," et al. 
        Zamura, R.F. "Personal Interview," et al. |  
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Here is a more detailed view of this
structure.  This view is a visual and textual plan of how a dialogic paper generally looks when it is finished. 
 
More Detailed Visual Plan or Map 
  
    
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        Descriptive Title*by Your Name
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        Introduction**Type
        of paper: a "proposal."  Proposal: Summarize
        it (1 sent.).  Purpose: If needed, add a purpose (a problem
        or need) your readers will understand (1-2 sent.).  Overall
        result: Summarize the results/outcomes after implementation (1
        sent.) of your proposal.  [1
        par.]
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        Abstract***If required or needed, a brief 
        
        summary of the overall proposal. [1-2
        par.]
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        Problem,
        Need, or Background(a)
        a Subtitle and, if needed, SUB-SUBTITLES, (b)
        a summarizing topic sentence, (c) a discussion
        developed using
        a list of
        problems/needs, (d) if helpful, the details
        supporting your ideas (such as quotations/paraphrases,
        graphics, statistics, etc.), and (e) a brief, concluding sentence.  [2+ par.]
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        Solution, Resolution, or
    
    Proposal(a)
        a Subtitle and, if needed, SUB-SUBTITLES, (b)
        a summarizing topic sentence, (c) a
        discussion developed using readers' questions,
        (d) if helpful, the details
        supporting your ideas (such as quotations/paraphrases,
        graphics, statistics, etc.), and (e) a brief, concluding sentence.  [2+ par.]
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        Plan or  Method of
    Implementation(a)
        a Subtitle and, if needed, SUB-SUBTITLES, (b)
        a summarizing topic sentence, (c) a
        discussion developed using activities, schedule, budget, personnel,
        and/or evaluation, (d)
        if helpful, the details
        supporting your ideas (such as quotations/paraphrases,
        graphics, statistics, etc.), and (e) a brief, concluding sentence.  [2+ par.]
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        Results or
        
        Outcomes(a)
        a Subtitle and, if needed, SUB-SUBTITLES, (b)
        a summarizing topic sentence, (c) a
        discussion developed using positives, negatives, and short- and
        long-term results, (d)
        if helpful, the details
        supporting your ideas (such as quotations/paraphrases,
        graphics, statistics, etc.), and (e) a brief, concluding sentence.  [2+ par.]
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        Credentials 
                 
        If required or needed, a brief summary of your qualifications. [1 par.] 
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        Conclusion 
                  
        Proposal (1-2 sent.).  Purpose (if needed;1-2
        sent.).  Summary of results/outcomes (1 or more
        sent.).  Final positive statement. 
        [1 par.]
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        Bibliography 
        [if Needed] 
        Bitson, A.J. Book. et al. 
        Jones, D. L. "Chart," et al. 
        Smith, M. S. "Diagram," et al. 
        Zamura, R.F. "Personal Interview," et al. 
        Create an alphabetized bibliography on a 
        separate page, according to the requirements of your 
        discipline/instructor.  Formats vary among differing disciplines. 
        (See the chapter the "Researching" section on "Quoting/Paraphrasing" 
	for more detail.) |  
      
The Key to Building a Proposal: Answering a Need in Detail 
The key to
building a proposal is to carefully and fully provide an answer or solution
(your proposal) to a need (a problem, lack, or new situation) using thorough
detail.  The overall organization of a proposal is to have the basic structure
of  
problem  >  solution 
>  method  >  results
 
  A proposal is a clear, simply ordered explanation 
  of why someone needs something, and how that need can be answered.  As in 
  most workplace writing, you need to have clear, obvious organization: separate 
  divisions or body sections, each with its own brief subtitle and a topic 
  sentence detailing what the subtitle implies.  You may develop these body 
  sections in any order you want as you write your first and second drafts.  
  However, at some point these body sections need to be carefully organized in 
  the pattern shown above, as follows. 
      Openings: 
      In a simple proposal, a brief title and opening paragraph often is enough. 
      However, more complex proposals may require more opening paragraphs as follows: 
    
    Title: Keep the title simple and efficient, and describe your
    proposal.  If appropriate for your workplace or instructor, you may
    print the title in slightly larger and/or bold print; otherwise, use normal
    type.  After the title, on a separate line, print your name (or names
    if the proposal is collaborative, in order of contribution or, if
    contribution is equal, in alphabetical order).  Iif appropriate or
    helpful, add a contact email address and/or phone number. 
    Introduction: Keep it simple.  State
    the type of paper you are writing in the introduction and/or the
    title (so readers can distinguish it from
    similar types of papers such as a report or a recommendation).  Also state the proposal 
    itself succinctly--preferably in one clear, strong sentence.  If your
    readers may not understand exactly why you are making this proposal, then
    you should also explain the specific purpose of your paper: i.e., is
    there a special problem or need such as a required change or a new
    opportunity that you need to mention so your readers know exactly why you
    are making the proposal?  Finally,
    you should summarize in a sentence or two the overall result or outcome 
    if you have not already done so.   
    Some workplaces also like to have a shorter
    version of the "abstract" (below) placed, instead, in the
    introduction.  And if you happen to be writing a proposal with
    research--a proposal requiring quotations, paraphrases, charts and graphs,
    or other details, it may be appropriate to place an especially important
    quotation or other detail in the introduction 
    Abstract: If
    requested to do so, you should write an abstract.  An abstract is a
    summary, often just a paragraph or two, of a paper you have written. 
    Sometimes workplace supervisors, especially those who are above your
    immediate supervisor or who are members of a supervising committee, may want
    a brief abstract of a proposal so that they do not have to read the entire
    paper.  At other times, an abstract may be useful when supervisors wish
    to refresh their memory of the key details of a proposal they already have
    read.  For more details about how to write an abstract, see "Writing
    an Abstract."  (Your supervisor or instructor may prefer a
    shorter abstract that is part of the "Introduction," above.) 
Main Body
      Sections:
      The exact names and final form or style of body sections in proposals
  may differ from workplace to workplace or instructor to instructor, so it
      always is important to ask your supervisor or instructor what he or she
      wants.  Most proposals require multiple paragraphs in each body
section; in fact, major proposals involving hundreds of thousands or millions of
dollars usually are book length, with each body section requiring one or more
"chapters."  When writing a proposal for a supervisor or
instructor, it usually is especially helpful to see good examples of previous
proposals this person has requested in order to understand exactly what contents
and body sections you should write.  Even though body sections may vary
dramatically from one to another proposal, usually there is an underlying
structure or overall pattern that is somewhat typical of most general workplace
proposals.  If your supervisor or instructor has no other pattern for you
to follow, the pattern below may be helpful: 
    
    Problem  or   Need: a
    thorough, helpful, knowledgeable description of the basic problem, need, or
    new requirement, or changed situation.  Break the problem or need into
    two or more subcategories, or list several problems/needs, explaining each,
    and start your list with an overall summary of the general problem/need
    area.   
    You should confine this problem or need and its description to
    just what can be solved by your proposal: i.e., don't wax at length about a
    series of problems or needs that your proposal does not address.  If research is
    appropriate or desirable, often this section is the place for adding
    statistics, quotations, and/or paraphrases that help highlight or better
    explain the problem or that compare it to such problems in similar
    situations.  If your proposal is for an academic project, this section
    offers the opportunity for you to provide background information and,
    perhaps, conflicting data or ideas that make your proposal
    appropriate.  
    As you develop this section,
    consider your readers' sensitivities and needs.  Do not blame anyone;
    moreover, do not make a problem or need sound like it is an error of judgment,
    a lack of intelligence, or any other negative event.  In this regard,
    remember that once upon a time, someone whose motives were probably, in
    their own way, just as pure--and whose vision was just as intelligent--as
    your own proposed what currently exists.  Rather, emphasize the
    constructive and the positive.  You may even wish to include a fault-relieving
    reason for the present problem or new need: for example, "Twenty years
    ago, no one was able to foresee the need for this project, but now we have a
    new opportunity to...."  Proposals in particular must foster
    teamwork.  They create change, which is not always an easy thing to
    start.  As a result, you need the cooperation of a great many people to
    accept the proposal, successfully implement it, and live with it happily
    after implementation. 
    Solution, Resolution, or
    
    Proposal: a general statement of one or more paragraphs of the
    solution or resolution that you propose.  This section should clearly
    explain exactly what the proposal is, what it means, and why it is the best
    available option.  The 5 W's of journalism might help in developing
    this initial explanation: 
    Questions to
    Answer in Explaining Your Proposal 
      
      
        
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          What? 
 
            Who?
 
            Where?
 
            When?
 
            Why/How?
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          What is the basic proposal?  
            Who is involved in it? 
            Where will it happen? 
            When will it happen? 
            Why is it good and/or how will it happen? |  
    However, you should keep this
    section relatively brief, explaining the proposal in general terms. 
    You should not yet explain the specific details of
    how the proposal will be carried out, nor should you yet describe the details of
    what the results or outcomes will be.  Those details should come later,
    in the sections below.  It may help to think of this section as a
    summary of your proposal and its purposes and results.  In this
    section, you have the opportunity to explain your reasoning to your readers
    in a language that is clear, logical, and thoughtful.  As you do so,
    keep in mind your readers and the questions they might ask.  Who might
    your readers be if your proposal is passed on to higher-level supervisors
    and/or a committee for consideration?  What kinds of questions might
    these different types of people ask?  Using the 5 W's of journalism
    above is a simple, efficient, and broad method of posing such
    questions.  However, the 5 W's are a generic system.  If you can
    brainstorm a more specific list of questions your own real workplace readers
    may ask, answering these questions may help you develop this section
    better.  Often, a combination of some of the 5 W's of journalism and
    your own brainstormed questions helps most.   
    Plan or  Method of
    Implementation: a detailed description, often with lists, of the
    steps of implementing your proposal and of the people, deadlines, and
    materials involved in doing so.  Proposals are the poetry of the
    business world: they require a strong, highly focused set of details in a
    relatively short space of paper.  The poetry is especially in the
    details: a proposal is worthless unless it has
    excellent details that show, step by step, how it can be implemented.  This section
    proves whether your proposal is possible to turn into a reality.  Start this section with a
    very brief summary of what you are going to present in it.  Then
    present details.  Usually you should use sub-subtitles.  Once
    again the exact categories you need may vary from situation to situation:
    for example, an academic proposal may not require a "Budget"
    section.  Check with your supervisor or instructor.  In workplace
    environments, you may need some or all of the following categories: 
      
      GENERAL DESCRIPTION OF ACTIVITIES--Write a general description
      of the number and types of activities if you are required to do so. 
      If not required, and especially if the activities are simple or few in
      number, this subsection can be combined with the next one,
      "Schedule." 
      SCHEDULE, STEPS, or
      DEADLINES--Use dates and descriptions of activities to show what
      you will do, step by step, and when.  In proposals suggesting large
      amounts of time or several complex series of activities, you may need
      several subcategories of "Schedule." 
      BUDGET--Show all the
      costs, both obvious and hidden.  Consider not only new purchases but
      also the dollar amounts of taking people's time and overhead away from
      their normal activities.  In proposals with complex finances, you may
      need several subcategories of "Budget." 
      PERSONNEL--Develop a job
      description--a role title and description of activities--for each person
      involved.  Include how much time will be required of each person,
      what he/she will cost (including benefits), and, if they already are
      employees, how much of their time will be taken away from their normal
      work and the dollar value of this time.  If you also are
      proposing specific individuals by name for the activities, it may be
      appropriate to develop a brief description of each person's credentials
      here; if additional descriptions of their credentials are helpful, you can
      add their resumes to the very end of the document and note that addition
      in the "Personnel" section.  (If you are the only person
      who will be active in implementation and you decide to add your
      credentials, you may do so here or at the end in a separate
      "Credentials" paragraph, below.) 
      EVALUATION--If
      appropriate, describe how you will evaluate the project's success and
      when.  In more complex projects, usually there is some kind of
      evaluation at least once or twice during it, at its end, and, often,
      several months or a year later when final outcomes can be better assessed. 
    Results, Product, Gain, or Outcomes: a discussion, list,
    and/or description of what will happen after successful implementation of
    your proposed project.  Though this section is placed near the end of
    your proposal, it is as important as the other sections, in some situations
    more so.  It is here that you show the proposal actually has
    merit.  Why should your proposal be implemented?  What good does
    it accomplish?  What bad might it do?  How will it affect the
    workplace and everyone connected to it, employees, customers, and
    owners?  The answers to these questions are very important to those who
    must decide whether to fund or reject your proposal.  You have to
    convince them that change is worthwhile--that it is safer or better than
    keeping everything as it is.     
    There are several ways this section can be developed.  Often, people
    develop a list of outcomes, then define and explain each one in more
    detail.  There are two pairs of subcategories often used in some form
    in a "Results" section: 
    "Results" Subcategories 
      
      
        
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          POSITIVEOUTCOMES
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          SHORT-TERMOUTCOMES
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          POTENTIALPROBLEMS
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          LONG-RANGEOUTCOMES
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    In longer and/or more complex proposals, you may need to
    develop these subcategories as official subtitles with their own separate
    lists or paragraphs.  In shorter and more simple proposals, you may not
    need to use these subcategories so obviously.  However, even in short
    proposals, it may be valuable to mention (after describing several positive
    results) at least one or two potential problems--during or after
    implementation--and how they can be handled.  And it also may be
    worthwhile to mention, after describing the short-term results, one or two
    long-term benefits, as well.  Doing so--mentioning both potential
    problems and long-range results--helps demonstrate that you have considered
    the full dimensions of what you are proposing. 
    The length of this section may be determined in part by how obvious and
    simple (or previously unimagined and complex) the outcomes may be to
    readers.  In any case, it is better to once again remember the
    workplace-writing maxim that your proposal may rise several levels higher
    than your immediate supervisor, so you should consider whether to explain
    outcomes more thoroughly to those who may not be immediately involved in
    day-to-day management.  You also need to consider the hopes and needs
    of these higher levels of supervision and tailor your suggestions to their
    perceptions and knowledge as well as you can. 
      Closing Paragraph(s):
      A simple proposal often requires only a short final paragraph to restate
      and summarize what you have said.  However, longer or more complex
      proposals sometimes require more: 
    
    Credentials or References: In
    some situations, the readers of your proposal may not know who you are or
    what you have accomplished in the past that gives you the appropriate
    background for making your proposal intelligently.  If such is the
    case, add a relatively brief paragraph summarizing your relevant experience,
    training, and/or education that makes you capable of writing this proposal
    well.  Often, a proposal writer also coordinates or assists in
    implementation of the proposed project; for this reason, you may also need
    to mention the credentials that make you an appropriate coordinator or
    assistant for implementation.  If a short paragraph is not enough to
    present yourself fully, then you may also add your resume to the end of the
    entire proposal and make a note of this addition in your
    "Credentials" paragraph.  (If you already have described your
    credentials in the "Personnel" subsection above, you do not need
    to repeat them here.)  At times, you may also--or instead-- need to
    briefly list or describe references: one or more people who know you and
    your work and can vouch for you.  When writing a references paragraph,
    generally you should very briefly state each reference's name, position,
    relevance to judging your work on this project, and phone number and/or
    email address. 
    Conclusion: a usually
    short paragraph summarizing your proposal, your need/problem, and the
    outcomes very briefly.  Some supervisors or instructors may prefer that
    you develop a longer conclusion of a paragraph or two by discussing the
    results or outcomes here, rather than in a separate
    "Results/Outcomes" section, as above. 
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Dangers to Avoid as You Organize   
  
  One of the dangers in writing a proposal  
  is to assume that you can
  say whatever you want in the proposal because the details can be changed once
  it is accepted.  This often can be entirely untrue.  Oftentimes,
  workplaces are not that flexible.  In other words, whatever you propose
  may come to pass exactly as you have proposed it.  For this reason, be
  sure that you know exactly what you are suggesting, especially in the details
  of the "Plan/Implementation" section.  Whatever it is, you may
  have to live with it for better or worse.
    
  
  Another danger, as stated above, is to underestimate how widely your
  proposal may be read and how high up the chain of command it may go. 
  Good proposals tend to have a life of their own, reaching a lot more readers
  than you might expect--even, sometimes, to subsidiaries, supervisors,
  and  committees entirely unrelated to the proposal's project. 
  Sometimes this happens because proud supervisors want to show others what
  their employees are doing, and sometimes because it is an easy way for
  supervisors to share current and future activities in their areas without
  having to write their own summaries.  In any case, it often is wise to
  write a proposal with a much larger audience in mind, vertically and
  horizontally, than your immediate supervisor.
    
  
  A third danger  lies in using a boring style that leaves your readers
  feeling that you do not strongly support your own proposal.  While
  proposals should be efficient and logical, the best proposals have a tone of
  underlying strength and excitement.  They do not sound emotional; rather,
  there is a confidence and a hope in the tone that convinces the reader not
  only that the author knows what he or she is talking about, but also that the
  author really does think the proposal is a great idea and very much hopes it
  will be accepted.  Generally you should not state in your proposal that
  you are excited and that your hopes or high, for that would sound
  unprofessional.  However, your tone in the paper clearly should convey
  your strong, positive attitude.
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As you complete your later drafts, look carefully at the visual map above and 
the sample papers in this chapter.  Rearrange the order of your body 
sections and of your paragraphs as needed.  Consider your use of major 
organizing devices: for example, have you placed the correct key sentences in 
your introduction and conclusion, and have you developed a subtitle and topic 
sentence at the beginning of each major body section?
 
  
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    Asterisks *, **, and *** for the 
    organizational plan or map above (similar advice given in most chapters): 
      *In most professions and businesses, the title is 
      typed simply: no quotation marks, underlining, or bold marking.  It 
      is centered, and the font size and style are those used in the rest of the 
      paper--normally a 12-point font in a style such as Times New Roman, 
      Garamond, or CG Times.  In a professional situation, you may use 
      academic style or whatever is commonly acceptable in your workplace. 
** In some disciplines, the "Introduction" subtitle 
may be optional or even forbidden.  (Most social sciences and psychology 
papers, for example, should not have an "Introduction" subtitle.)  
***Some
professions and disciplines sometimes require a short 
summary, 
abstract, or précis
(see) of a text before you begin responding to it.  Ask your
instructor.  Such a summary generally should have no quotations within it
and, in professional and business writing, it usually must be a summary of the 
contents of your paper.         
      ***Some instructors may allow--or even, occasionally, prefer--your paper
      to be completely free of subtitles.  In most professional and 
      business situations, however, subtitles are required or encouraged.  
      That is because they are efficient.  Because of the expectation of 
      efficiency, your topic sentences should be very brief, sometimes just a 
      transition word, along with a key word from your title or your 
      introduction's main statement of the paper's subject: for example, in a 
      paper about a zoo, your three major topic sentences (at the beginning of 
      each major topic section) might start with "First, the zoo...," "Second, 
      the zoo...," and "Third, the zoo...").  (See "Topic 
      Sentences.")    
      In addition, it is more efficient to add 
      simple, short transition words than to avoid them.  Your word count 
      may end up slightly higher, but your improved clarity will make your paper 
      much easier to read.    
For more
about organizing body sections, topic sentences, and subtitles in general,
please go to "Organizing
College Papers."  For more about organizing paragraphs, go to the
"Paragraphing"
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    In revising a professional proposal, the focus techniques
with which you started in the "Introduction" to this
chapter also can help you finish your paper:
 
 
  FOUR FOCUSES FOR REVISING: Subject,
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     SUBJECT: Have you stayed on the subject 
    throughout?  In a proposal, this means being sure that everything ties 
    together logically, not just in your own mind but in the minds of readers.  
    You also should avoid adding details and thoughts ideas just because they 
    are interesting.  In professional writing, be efficient in keeping to 
    the subject at hand.  (If you have a really helpful or interesting
      detail that is indirectly related, place it in a brief footnote.) 
      If you think your audience may have trouble grasping some parts of your
      paper, add
      background or explanation.   
     Be sure, in addition, to introduce, explain,
      or connect each resource to the content of your
      discussion.  This means that whether you have a quotation, 
    paraphrase, graph, image, or copy of something from the Internet, be sure 
    you have at least a sentence before and after it showing readers its purpose 
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    FIRST & SECOND DRAFTS: Have
      you used all of the needed steps to write and revise your drafts?  
        
        
        Free-write: If, after
          reading your paper aloud, you feel there are places where the paper
          sounds choppy or the flow is otherwise poor, try rewriting one or more
          paragraphs spontaneously without looking at your original words. 
          (To help cure
          choppy sentences, see "Using
          Mixed-Length Sentences" in the "Editing" section.")  
        Imagine you are saying it aloud to a friend, instructor, or work 
        coordinator.  Then revise and edit the new portions.  For general freewriting, see "How
          to Start First Drafts.")  
        
         Gather details: Have you
          spent too much time on general explanation and too little on
          details?  Details--names, dates, data, charts, lists, diagrams, 
        illustrations, and/or quotations and paraphrase--are the proofs of
          a good professional paper.  They also are the first elements your readers tend
          to notice and the ones they will most remember, whether in the same 
        kind of detail or with a strong sense of you having supported your 
        points well.  
        
         If you have too many details for one 
        section, consider dividing the section into two sections or subsections.  
        Instead, you might try moving some of the details to another section 
        where they might fit as well or better.   
    
        
         Write for your audience: Imagine your
        audience as being more than your immediate supervisor or
          instructor.  To whom might your supervisor show this paper? 
          What committee(s) might see it?  A good professional paper can travel far,
          and it may even be the basis of legal action, good or bad, or the
          basis of a proposals, profits, or losses.  Have you visualized 
        your audience?  
 Have you read your paper aloud as if reading to this audience?  
        Have you tried reading your paper aloud to a colleague, peer, friend, or 
        family member, pretending he or she is your audience?  If you are 
        working with others in a pair or committee, have you asked them to read, 
        comment on, and help rewrite it?
        
         Organize: Have you used either the 
        organization above or a modified version of it suggested by your 
        supervisor or instructor?  Have you carefully added and then reread 
        each major and minor part of this organizational system?  Have you kept your
          introduction, conclusion, and/or a beginning summary reasonably short, moving excess discussion
          in them to body sections?  Do you need to reorganize the body
          sections for the greatest degree of logic, clarity, and audience
          interest?  Does each body section fulfill its purpose as expected 
        with this type of paper as applied to your particular discipline or 
        profession?
        
         Research: iF you need
          to support your points and/or others' points with research, do you have
          a sufficient number of high-quality sources?  Have you fully
          integrated them with your paper by citing and documenting them?  
        (In most disciplines or professions, "citing" means adding authors' 
        names and page numbers beside quotations, paraphrases, graphic 
        elements--e.g., pictures or charts--and anecdotes of experiences.  
        "Documenting" means providing a bibliography--or, if you have just a 
        very few sources, you sometimes are allowed to provide bibliographic 
        details in parentheses immediately after source material or in a 
        footnote.)  
 If you are using non-print sources such
          as interviews, videos, or television, will they be considered 
        appropriate and representative (well representing a viewpoint needed and 
        accepted by your audience?  If you are
          using online sources, have you checked them carefully to verify their
          quality and accuracy (see "Evaluating 
        Web Sites" in OnlineGrammar.org)?
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    STYLE, TONE, AUDIENCE, & CRITICAL THINKING: Have you converted all parts of
            your writing to the appropriate style and tone?  This type 
    of paper
            should use a formal  professional writing style.  If your 
    audience and purpose are of a more general nature (rather than of an 
    academic or scholarly nature), then you may want to use a more efficient 
    business style of writing with a mixture of medium and short sentences, and 
    varied medium and short paragraphs.  
     
    Generally, in professional and business writing, the tone or voice in your 
    words should show professional competence, honesty, and confidence.  
    Warmth may or may not be helpful, depending on your audience, but coldness, 
    sarcasm, or emotionalism should be avoided.  To check tone or voice, 
    try reading your paper aloud--or have a colleague, peer, or friend read it 
    aloud to you--so you can hear whether your sentences sound as you want them 
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    AUTHENTICITY: Have you made your paper as 
    reasonable, practicable, and logical as possible to your audience?  If 
    you're not sure, ask questions of your audience ahead of time, and imagine 
    how your audience member(s) might want elements of
      your paper explained to them.  Have you tried to go to the heart
      of the matter you are discussing?   Have you brought interesting, vivid, and even 
    unusual details into the paper's contents?  Have you been true to 
    yourself and your own interests in the subject by trying to find the most 
    interesting information to write about in each paragraph, something 
    meaningful to you?    |  
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Final Advice Given in Most Chapters 
In most papers, you should use the third-person 
pronoun: "he," "she," "it," and "they."  You should not use "you" 
unless you 
are  giving directions, or writing a diary or personal reflection, or a less 
formal magazine or newsletter article or other specific advice (as in this 
chapter).  In professional writing, "I" is never used (unless occasionally 
in the form of an anecdote, starting with a phrase such as "For example, I 
was..."). 
  Paragraphing in most academic papers follows some relatively standard guidelines. 
You usually are working with a large amount of information when you write a 
  professional paper.  For this
reason, clear, consistent paragraphing becomes even more important.  Your
paragraphs should help you logically divide your body sections into smaller 
  sub-parts, ideas, or sub-ideas--just for the sake of clarity and ease of 
  reading, if for no other reason.  Also, generally, for a short- to 
  medium-length paper, you should have one paragraph each for your introduction, 
  conclusion, and--if you have it--your summary.    
  You should, as a matter of habit,  have at least two or three paragraphs per page in your final draft. 
  On the other hand, be careful not to have too many paragraphs per page.  If you have a lot of 
  short, choppy paragraphs, combine them.  The goal, graphically speaking, 
  is to provide your audience with a variety of paragraph lengths--an 
  occasional short one for emphasis or change of pace added to a mix of varying 
  medium and long paragraphs.  The goal in terms of content is to make your 
  ideas flow so well that your audience can easily keep them clear and separate 
  without ever even noticing your paragraphing (or, for that matter, any other 
  mechanical aspect of your paper).  
  For more advice, go to the "Paragraphing"
chapter.     
  Several other common, useful strategies 
  of efficient, thorough editing are in the several chapters of the "Revising 
  and Editing" section.  Some of these strategies also are summarized 
  in the following very-brief web page, which is aimed especially at people 
  writing professionally and/or in their majors:     
Very Brief 
Review of How
to Edit Your Final Draft 
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Good luck with  writing  this type of paper.  
For more advanced and/or interesting information on this type of paper, please 
see the "Advanced" 
section of the chapter. 
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